We are writers

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We are working on making our writing interesting for our readers. Adding descriptive detail and interesting words helps to create a picture in our readers' minds. 

This week we had a close look at this picture and talked about how we could write about it in a way that would be interesting for our readers. We all agreed that it would be very boring if we just said "The bird is flying."

Here is some of our writing:

There is a hawk above the river. The river is flowing over a jungle with steep rushing mountains through the jungle.

By Zoë

The hawk is swooping. There is a river flowing over a jungle with steep hills.

By Cooper

There is a hawk flying in the sky. It is a beautiful hawk in the sky.

By Malia

I can see a hawk up in the sky and the mountains and there are little trees and big trees and big mountains and little mountains.

By Rosina

There is a hawk in the sky. There is a beautiful garden. There is a beautiful swirling river. There are mountains.

By Vai

I can see a hawk and I can see a tree and I can see mountains. The trees are tall and I can see a river.

By Reijeli

The hawk is floating over the mountains and the river is green.

By Olivia

The hawk is flying high and there is a green river.

By Lucian

I can see hawks. The hawks are swooping to find their home where the trees are.

By Aryan

The hawk is swooping. There is a river flowing, rushing through a beautiful jungle.

By Ali

I saw a hawk gliding. The hawk swooped down on me.

By Beau

The water is rushing in the river. I am on the most powerful eagle. It is not for fun. The eagle is a bus for special people. There are rocks and trees.

By Edward

The hawk is swooping over a river and it is also going over a jungle.

By Max