12 May 2019

Adding detail to our writing




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We are continuing to work on adding descriptive detail and interesting words to our writing to create a picture for our readers. 

Here is some of our writing:


The seal is on the ice. The sea looks bumpy like it is going to freeze. The water looks like jelly.


By Zoë


The seal is white like the ice and cute like a puppy. She is waiting for her mother to come. Her eyes are black.


By Rosina


The seal is on the ice and it is looking around for its mum. The mum came back to the baby seal. The mum brought their food.


By Reijeli


The cute baby seal is resting on the snow. The sea looks like jelly and the seal is camouflaging into the snow and it is adorable.


By Safwaan


I am in Antarctica. I see a furry seal. It is on an iceberg. The sea looks solemn. It looks like it is going to freeze.


By Edward


The little seal is fluffy. It is waiting for its mother and father. They are getting some fish for the little seal.


By Max

1 comment:

  1. I can read so many descriptive words . They are helping make pictures in my mind's eye.

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